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May 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I think it was well-written for a beginner at smut. My only advice at this point would be to slow it down a little and delve deeper into the imagery and emotional aspects. For instance, Buffy probably would've been a little more hesitant and Faith probably would've had to do some more persuading. I do like your writing though and it was a fun read :)
Best wishes,
Vanilla Latte
Best wishes,
Vanilla Latte
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March 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good stuff! I'm a BIG Faith fan and I think you captured the real characters well...they spoke as they do on the TV show pretty much, especially Faith. Well done.
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July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XD
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July 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad! Totally fuckin hot.
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was great for a beginner
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great work! i never would have thought that you were new!
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad... i think it could have done with a little bit more before they got straight to fucking, but overall, i thought it was pretty good ;)