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Reviews for Honourable Sons

By : JLH
  • From mendenbar on May 07, 2013
    This story really deserves continuation. It is absolutely marvelous and the writing is wonderfully evocative and thought provoking. Wish AFF had a "favorite" option.
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  • From Alwaysand on June 21, 2008
    I hadn't realized that I had yet to review this story. It was already at Chpt 39 when I found it and I have been patiently checking for the next update regularly and it hit me that I hadn't let you know how much I like it. Bad reader me! Just so you know I have it listed as a favorite link on my computer and I check daily to see if is been updated.
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  • From HavocTellenoi on March 01, 2008
    Another amazing story. Then again, I haven't read anything you've written that hasn't left me completely breathless upon concluding a chapter. What with "Elderly Pets" and "Five Golden Rings" one is more than happy to add this lovely piece into the mix. And really, this is a lovely addition. And I am so looking forward to the next chapter! Cause Baby Esther has to have something cools happening to her too, being all interdimensionally energized too! Love your Connor by the way, he's rather true to form and the snuggling Spike and Angel relationship much adored too. ^_^
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  • From ANON - Daeomae on June 27, 2006
    I just love this fic!! I had read the first twenty-two chapters and then RL got in the way, so tonight I read the rest here. I can barely wait for the next. *grins* Great job!!

    Dae
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  • From ANON - Emma on January 18, 2006
    Still loving it and can't wait for more.
    Lovingly as always.
    **EMMA**
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  • From ANON - rancidangel on August 25, 2005
    i really like this so far, not really sure where the last bit is leading to but keep writting.
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  • From ANON - Emma on August 11, 2005
    me again! excellent next chapter, love the faerie piece, very funny and ironic! wicked. I'm on tenterhooks for more!
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  • From ANON - Emma on August 10, 2005
    FUCKING EXCELLENT!!!!!!!
    everythng is perfect and the emotin, discription and everything in general is excelent!
    great fic! Hope there is more to come!! can't wait!
    Wicked story and good twists, would recomend to any one.

    I also have a Angel fanfic if you care to read! Soul Stealers, by horsewhisperer! please review if you read!
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  • From ANON - Littlest Coyote on August 05, 2005
    The devotion between Spike and Angel is so wonderfull. It feels like a couple, not just a contrived pairing. I'm looking forward to seeing if the Connor/Dawn thing works.
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  • From ANON - myladymystere on July 24, 2005
    love the story so far.you developed and write the bonding between angel/spike well .good to have willow,would like to see faith come to help the boys with w&h. love the dawn/conner possibity. thought dawn was left out to much in the series. hope you add more soon!!
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  • From ANON - Aeryn S on July 11, 2005
    Well done! Hope you post more soon!
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  • From ANON - CC on May 07, 2005
    So you are a new writer. Good luck and keep writinng, you are doing fine. I am enjoying your story and interested to see where it will go next. Since you asked, I will give you some constructive crit. I am a wriitng teacher and what I say will be professional advice, please do not take it personally. I say that not because I intend to be nasty but because too many [though not all] fan ficcers react negatively to anything that is not overwhlemingly positive. I also won't go into every technical aspect here, because, well, who has that kind of time? Tomorrow's Mother's Day, and your eyes would probably cross long before I got to the end. That being said... your characterizaqtion is pretty good, there has been no wildly divergent behavior that can't be supported by text. I do hope that you palne to bring in some of he other's evenutally. They cannot go up against W&H on a large scale alone, not even of Willow is 'the most powerful witch in the world'. We've all seen how well that wprks, or doesn't. It also doesn't make sense, unless you can construct a plot that does not count on wildy improbable results from certain actions and screamingly ridiculous coincidences. These things have waylaid more than one promising story. That is true even of the tv series'. The new character - F'laid - is very well conceived and interesting. She is not a cypher which is good to see. However, as to the matter of her accent it. Any good writing teacher/book/article will tell you not to write a character's accent trepeatedly. It is distractiong to the reader and form the text. The people whohave probably done it the best most recently are Mark Twain, Tenessee WIlliams, and Maya Angelou. Enough said? A better way to handle it is to introduce the character with some narrative about the softness, rhythm, sussuration, brogue, rtc of a character's speech along with a few accented words. After that you could occaisionally introduce a new word with the 'strange' pronunciation and other character's reaction to it. However, don't overuse this device. Also, in character tags and narrative tags, refer to his/her ethnicity. We will get the idea. In a genre where demons and aliens exist and have their own languages, it is more acceptable to write those out since we are presumably speaking about language patterns that no one has ever heard before. Next, the use of the wprd 'lover' as a title - It is cliche and reminds one of bad seventies porno. Unless there is an established speech pattern (i.e. Wolverine using 'darlin'') then you are better off letting us see the affection and the love through dialogue and action But if you must, the occaisional 'love' or softly spoken 'my heart' or even the aforementioned 'darlin'' sounds more natural. 'Lover' works better in sarcastic or ironic dialogue and in narrative when referring to another character. You are bringing in description and giving a pretty good sense of place as well as developing ancillary characters that show us that your primary characters do not exist in a vacuum. That'a all good. Lastly, even if you never get another review, remember that you are writing for youself - because of something inside of you - and keep writing. People are reading, it's just that not everyone is going to, or is [by personality] inclined to make a comment. Fan ficcers who say that they have abndoned stories because no one gave them feedback when they are getting hits obviously did not have that need inside of them. Personally, I hate being coerced and have stopped reading stories because of it. Please keep writing, I am looking forward to more and I hope this helps. P.S. please forgive any misspellings that I did not catch, the laptop keyboard drives me crazy sometimes.
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  • From ANON - Tim on April 20, 2005
    Nice !

    T
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