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Reviews for Poof, Your Gone

By : PepsiCola
  • From PepsiCola on January 19, 2006
    I took your advice and re- read it, I realized that it is really out of character. Thank you for the advice :)
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  • From AngelofShadows on January 19, 2006
    Some tips...
    1- Make your chapters longer.
    2- Willow is acting more like Buffy in the first chapter and others are out of character too. Try to work more on getting their personalities right.
    3- Don't do this ?!?!?!. If a character is showing a lot of emotion then try to express that with words. Detail can make a story so much better.
    4- Go back and proofread your work. There are some spelling mistakes and mixed up words.

    I'm not flaming you. Your story does have potential. I just hope that I could help.
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