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Reviews for Angelus

By : KagetsuAsame
  • From ANON - VICKI on May 18, 2005
    I really like your story so far. I love LOVE Angel/Xander stories so even if you don't make this a series keep writing and as long as it Angel/Xander/Spike or any combo of the above you will have a fan. The premise is original. I've read fics about if Angel wasn't cursed but no one thought of Darla as the cursed protagonist before. If this becomes a series I world love to see how you handle the Darla losing her soul issue. Who would give her perfect happiness, Giles? (I shake in disgust) that way Xander & Angel can help Buffy end the Apolcolypse.


    My only critism is some of your scenes need more detail and your Buffy is out of charecter. Example: When Angel threathened Buffy with the death of her friends she just went home and asked if Xander wanted to go back. She never attempted to talk Xander out of going or attempted to warn and hide her friends. Where is the scene when her mother questions her about Angel and why her attacker knew Buffy? The chapter didn't have another writing to make it believeable. I thought for sure the scoobies would try to fight and/or hide and Angel would stalk and threathen. That way Angel would get a chance to kill Jessie or at least Willow's fish! That way you'd heighten the drama and it would be a gruesome scene when they found his victim. Also you never gave Xander a chance to want to go back to Angel. So the call of the bond between these charecters isn't clear.

    I'm not saying you should rewrite now but remember these thoughts when you write the next chapter. Once the story is complete you may want to repost before you add it to any other sites.

    Best of Luck!
    Vicki
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  • From ANON - dragonclaw21974 on May 18, 2005
    Really good chapter.

    Maybe it's because I'm just a little twisted, but I can't help hoping that Angelus gets to keep Xander.

    Looking forward to more.
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  • From ANON - Christine on May 14, 2005
    Yay! Another chapter!!! I love this story soo much, possesive Angelus is very fun to see. Well, hopefully with the claiming being complete things will start to smooth out a bit more between Angelus and Xander. Why did Darla have to come back? I never did like her very much, but it is funny that she is the one with the soul. Please post lots more!
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  • From ANON - Christine on May 13, 2005
    Wow, this story is really good! I love the pairing of Xander and Angelus. Ok, I know that this may be slightly out of the character that you are trying to show, but will Angelus ever be slightly gentle or tender towards Xander? Suppose Angelus is satisfied that Xander won't run away and eventually wants Xander to genuinely like him, will he ever be a little more gentle? Please?? Lol, I know that this doesn't fit with the way that the character is right now but a wee tiny bit of tenderness would be great! I feel really sorry for Xander, (obviously) because of all of the pain that he is going through. But, I really like this story irregardless if you change any of the characters or not. It really gets my emotions going especially with the way that you write. Please post lots more cause I want to see what happens next!
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  • From ANON - Zoelai on May 12, 2005
    SOOO Cool
    Love it, please write more
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 12, 2005
    hpe you write more soon poor little xander (evil Grin)
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  • From ANON - Ptijade on May 12, 2005
    MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!! please?
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  • From ANON - dragonclaw21974 on May 11, 2005
    It just wasn't Xander's day was it, and it looks like it might get worse. I will be looking forward to the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Amy on May 11, 2005
    I'm not a great reviewer and I'm sorry...


    but this piece is brilliant. I added it to my favorites and you haaave to update! pleeeaase?
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  • From ANON - anonymous_fan on May 08, 2005
    hmmmm getting better........
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  • From ANON - Rivana on May 07, 2005
    I'm torn, but interested. Really hoping for a non submissive Xander. Would be nice to read an A(us)/X fic that didn't go by the set pattern...
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 06, 2005
    more more more more more more more more more more more more more more !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - anonymous_fan on May 06, 2005
    hmmmmm all i can say is its got potential and its interesting. update soon if you can.
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  • From ANON - Hajnie-chan on May 06, 2005
    Wow! You've got me completely addicted! I can't wait to read more! I just hope...well... that he won't be too cruel...but ah... I'll just have to to wait and see hum? Update soon please!
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  • From ANON - Lisn on May 05, 2005
    OMG!! I LOVE IT!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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