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Reviews for Obsidian Moonlight

By : Melody21
  • From ANON - neal on June 11, 2006
    The constant switching between first, and thrid person naration is driving me nuts. One minute your writing it like the narrator is describing Fatiths POV, the next the narrator IS Faith and Buffy is the reader, then you suddenly switch back. Confusing as hell.

    Other than that I love it. Story's fairly well thought out captivating. Looking forward to reading the last few chapters.
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  • From ANON - blu on December 25, 2005
    more please.....
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  • From ANON - mecella on September 16, 2005
    please please please please update Obsidian. It's a great read and it's been so long since you've written anything new (oh, could you please update 'corrupting kim' as well. love that story, too). just two technical critiques for 'obsidian.' 1) minor grammatical errors here and there i.e the misuse of your and you're; 'your' being the possesive form of you *your dog, your house* and 'you're' being the contraction of you & are *you're [you are] going to update these stories right?* . Prolly stuff you already know and something a beta reader would catch. 2) Your Point of View keeps shifting. You jump around alot between first and third person. One minute you're telling the story from B's POV and then suddenly we're into third person omniscient. Very jarring.
    Otherwise, great story. *cheer* Write on
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  • From ANON - Black Haired Demon on May 27, 2005
    Love it! Okay so you do have some minor but very stupid grammar mistakes... but still YOU did GREAT!
    So if you please grace us with more, more chapters ^_-
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  • From ANON - Kat on May 26, 2005
    Need more!!! I love this story!!!
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  • From ANON - kitty on May 24, 2005
    awe adorable. please update soon :) (or i kick ur ass ^_^ ) i heart you lol
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  • From ANON - kitty on May 24, 2005
    i lurve it! *eagerly awaits the update*
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  • From ANON - Kristen on May 18, 2005
    If I say i'll kick your ass will that make you wanna update sooner? Well I can't really, but its out there. Loved the update, hated the time you made us wait. Anyway, nice update. WANT MORE!!!
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  • From potmunkey on May 18, 2005
    It's about damn time you updated this! Anyway great chapter and hope write more soon.
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  • From heartofstone on May 18, 2005
    Hey Ice, long time babe, not so long next time huh, and Im gonna keep my end of the deal I've almost finished "Not a sister thing" so you better come up with something to top that!
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  • From ANON - Jehaan on May 18, 2005
    Me like..lol,definitely still like..

    The "I spoon you" bit was so funny,I can just imagine Faith whipsering it down the phone..
    Update soon though,yeah?

    Or you'll have one VERY cranky woman to deal with! (Just kidding,I just want the update!)
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  • From ANON - nate on April 14, 2005
    great story! please continue!!
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  • From ANON - Ms Ice on April 03, 2005
    Hey Nikki....yes i have read green quarter...and i have read the fic that uses that line...but i didnt rip it off from her...i swear it...
    its a personal experience of mine between me and my bestfriend...although it is completely co oincidental and i understand where ur coming from i didnt mean for it to be set out that way...
    if it helps i will go ask green quarter for permission...but i still place emphasis that i didnt use her stuff...i love green quarter and have always supported her work....
    but thank you for bringing it to my attention and sorry for making you assume something like that...
    i like to think my story draws from personal experiences but i do have to take in some other authors works...thanks though :)
    Hopefully besides that i hope you enjoyed the fic... i cant have sucked that much ryt?? :(

    Ms Ice
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  • From ANON - Nikki on April 02, 2005
    sorry, i got cut off....

    anyways, the series was called 'An Ever Fixed Mark' and I think it was in the story called 'Mercy of the Fallen' that the whole spoon thing comes from. Sam and Brooke use a spoon to declare their love and they say 'I spoon you.' Now I don't know if you did this on purpose or not, but GQ is a great author who doesn't deserve to have her stuff ripped off and not get any credit for it. If you got permission from her or something, then totally disregard everything I said, but if you just took her stuff, I would just remove that out of respect for both GQ and yourself.
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  • From ANON - Nikki on April 02, 2005
    yeah, i don't think this is the same author, so i thought i'd point out to you that, while i like this story a lot, you totally ripped off someone else's idea. there's a author that goes by 'green quarter' who writes diff fics, including Sam/Brooke stories from Popular. GQ wrote a series called 'An E
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