Reviews for A Good Night's SleepBy : razzaname |
AHEM!! It's been almost 3 weeks without an update.....the natives are getting restless.
Another good chapter, though while the Anya scene was good I hope you go back to focusing on Buffy and Dawn for awhile. You're making good progress in turnung the two of them into Willow's personal sluts. The "sleepwalking" outside thing was fun and I van't wait to see where Buffy will sleepwalk to next. Or maybe she'll get clever about it and realizing she's got an issue ask Willow to use some of the chains and manacles they have lying around and chain Buffy to her bed before she goes to sleep. Something Willow will reluctantly do, but only because her best friend begged her to do so.
Nice but I would like to see you keep the emphasis on the Summers sisters. Continue with the theme of letting them become more aware (as a dream) of what's going on, perhaps letting Dawn watch and applaud (and join in?) as Buffy is 'seen to'. It might be fun if they start to confide their worries and humiliations to Willow and let her be all inwardly smug.
As others have said, the sleepwalking theme is great - difficult to see how to escalate it as Willow would not want the police to be involved.
The difficulty with this sort of fic is that one always needs to up the action somewhat each chapter without it getting silly. I'm optimistic you can do it.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Chapter 06: The Willow-Anya bit was fun (the dialogue between the two was hilarious and spot-on) but what really thrilled me were the Buffy scenes. The callous way Willow had Buffy lying naked outside for most of the night; to move her back inside only to drag her outside again once morning comes. Loved how Willow set-up the still sleeping Buffy :-) And the subsequent public exposure and humiliation (though short ;-) ) bit was just the icing on the cake :-)
Thanks for this brilliant chapter! Looking forward to the next one :-)
hey add xander to this story.
Heh. This story is very entertaining. Buffy and Dawn's slut training is progressing nicely. A few more sessions and they'll be ready to sexually serve Willow while awake.
Chapter 05: Love Dawn’s punishment, cruel Willow is fun. Buffy’s involvement in her sister’s correction is a nice touch. I also think it fit the chapter rather well that Buffy suffered another embarrassing sleepwalking incident.
Perhaps next chapter it is Buffy’s turn to get punished? After all, Willow can’t tolerate her making come-hither eyes at Tara ;-)
Anyhow, thanks for another great chapter :-) Can't wait to see the next one :-)
Chapter 04: Thanks for the update. Love the new chapter. Looking forward to the next one :)
Can't wait to see what happens next. Great chapter!
This story just keeps getting better and better.....can't wait for the next chapter. Oh, and thanks for the last update.
Fun chapter. That sisterly 69 was very hot.
Eager to see what depraved sex-stuff Willow will come up with next.
Chapter 01 - 03: So far I like this story. Love that Willow was able to hold back and didn't fuck Tara. Buffy and Dawn are much better targets for her dark urges. I think she should do more and more things to the Summers sisters. It is fun to see her mess with their minds. The ‘vivid dream state’ - half-awake, half-asleep - sure is a nice touch in that regard.
Some ideas for future chapters:
- Have Willow get serious about training the Summers sisters. Her final aim is to have both of them as her slaves, whether they like it or not.
- Willow makes Buffy and Dawn go sleepwalking. Of Course, Willow has them do only humiliating activities. Like Buffy taking a walk around the house naked. Willow snaps her awake and graciously lets the embarassed woman back inside the house. Buffy and Dawn won’t suspect anything as they think its their own subconciousness at fault. Willow does her best to encourage that believe.
This scheme even gives the opportunity to get Tara involved. Simply have her stay over once again. During the night she is startled awake by Buffy coming downstairs. The slayer’s dim expression and glazed eyes clue her in. Buffy sits down across from Tara and starts masturbating right in front of the blonde witch. Willow snaps Buffy awake just as she orgasms. Mortified Buffy runs upstairs. Willow and Tara have a talk, with Willow confessing Buffy’s troubles. Willow reveals her idea that if they help Buffy act out these dark fantsies of hers while awake the sleepwalking will stop. Tara is reluctant but even she can’t deny the lusty feelings Buffy’s performance has brought forth.
- Have Willow use subliminal messages. That way she can impose some ‘slave rules’ on them that they’ll have to follow even while awake. Like only sitting with their legs spread wide, wearing no underwear and other such things. At first, Buffy and Dawn are able to fight it off, but day by day it’s getting more difficult to ignore the compulsions.
- Have Willow make Buffy the ‘ass slave’. Start her off with sniffing Willow’s used panties. In the end, Buffy can only cum while tasting Willow or Tara’s ass juice, she is only able to climax with her tongue deep up their asses. She only gets wet while butt-fucked or someone plays with her ass. Pussy fucking does nothing for her. That way the mighty slayer is even more under Willow’s control.
Hey, when are we going to get another great chapter...it's been two weeks.
Chapter 3: Another excellent chapter of this wonderful twisted tale. I liked that Willow actually managed to surpress the understandable strong urge to buttfuck her former girlfriend. It gives her at least a tiny bit of integrity.
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