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Reviews for Folly

By : velvetwhip
  • From RogueMudblood on September 08, 2012

    I really like the premise, and you've executed it well. You've captured Angel's self-deprecation and Willow's misery and used them to tell a captivating story.

    Having said that, I have one small suggestion: please eliminate the parenthetical statements. To be quite honest, the dialogue is done well enough, that I don't need the (his), (you), (or maybe only wakefulness), etc pointed out to me. All pretense aside, by including those things with as well as you've written this piece, it appears that you think your readers too thick to understand subtlety.

    Having said that, I do think you captured some very interesting emotions from Angel in this piece. Merging him a bit with his demon in order to treat Willow as brutally as he does, without crossing that line was very well done. I also liked that you acknowledged that the rapport between them, their relationship at its core, prevented Angel from losing his soul.

    Thank you for sharing, and happy writing!
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