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By : Graycatl
  • From ANON - Anon on January 30, 2006
    use the damned chapter feature, already.
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  • From ANON - Southern Aurora on January 29, 2006
    Pam...definately improving since you started to write fic! But you still need to get a beta reader for grammar and spelling. Don't be afraid to find a beta reader from one of the archieves like SR or SA. I hope that you'll take my advice and give it your best shot. I also have to say that I doubt that any archieve will take this fic the way it is...but remeber that I think that you are definately improving. I'm sorry to sound negative but I believe in honesty. You really need a beta reader that will be honest with you!
    But you need to take it a step further and with that improvement I think you're on a winner!
    Take Care
    Southern Aurora
    (not to be mixed with the author Aurora)

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  • From ANON - JenxGeR on January 28, 2006
    Hi, I hope you don't mind me saying this, but I agree with the other review. You really need a beta reader. Nice concept, but the paragraphing and grammer needs amendments. And you should really post them all in 1 story instead of each update as a seperate post. It kinda messes up the page. :)
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  • From ANON - pegasus2704 on January 28, 2006
    sorry, obviously i need a beta for my comments! :)
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  • From ANON - pegasus2704 on January 28, 2006
    this seems like a good start, but i think that, with help. you could really develop this storylive into something very interesting. You appear to have a lot of ideas, and seem to have a solid grip on the complexity of the relationship between the two ,aom characters, but I really feel that a beta reader could help you turn this into something special. This is a good start, but dont be afraid to ask for help in polishing it: that is the difference between a piece of writing, and an actual story. Good premise, but dont be worried to ask for some aid. It helped me with my stories, so I know it can help with yoursQ


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  • From ANON - Anne on December 22, 2005
    Jeez...take a freaking hint and STOP WRITING. You were terrible when you were calling yourself JoJo, and you're not any better now. Just please, for the sake of everyone on this site, don't write anymore. Some people are just not meant to be writers, and you are one of those people. A beta won't hel you. Nothing will help you. Just stop writing. I'm begging you...
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  • From ANON - simplewords on December 22, 2005
    I'm not trying to be mean or anything, but I think you could use a beta. Your story seems a little choppy. It doesn't flow from paragraph to paragraph, it comes in short little blocks of words. You need to work on your discriptions as well, and I think a beta could help you with that (depending on the beta's skills).

    Fix these things and I'm sure your story will be great; it does have potential after all.
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