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From ANON - TheShadowCat on January 19, 2006
So, here I am, getting ready to go to bed when I decide to check in here and what do I see? A very long awaited new chapter. So much for sleep.

Another wonderful chapter and I hope you can update soon. I'm hoping this isn't the end because after all, you still have the mommy to be to deal with. Please hurry.
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From ANON - nomad on January 18, 2006
*points upward* Wot she said.
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From ANON - RippersPet on January 18, 2006
WOW!!! When I read "Broken, Beautiful" I was so impressed. The storyline itself was impressive, well thought out, well written, great characterizations, etc., but not only was the storyline impressive, but the fact that you could make what is usually so distateful as non-con, slavery, torture, etc., and make it palatable... actually, beyond palatable, addictive is more like it! And, for those of us who don't normally read the hard-core slavery type stuff, this is SO beautifully written that it makes all that secondary... it's the characters that are foremost! I am so pleased that you decided to write a sequel to "Broken Beautiful", because I wondered what would become of the new "alterated" Xander... whether or not he'd be able to survive or not. As for this sequel, it's every bit as good as the first! I have to say that it's been more mild, so far, than the original... I mean, even at the "farm", Xander wasn't treated badly or tortured... as far as "masters" go, he was luckier in the sequel (so far, at least...). What's to become of the woman he's impregnated? If she survives, then you've got a new character to "incorporate"... And, aren't there several (if not more) demons after Spike and Xander, at this point? I DO hope there's going to be a little more "adventure" in this one, some more thrills and chills, if you know what I mean... like the original. Although, as far as sequels go... this is the best I've ever read. You are certainly talented and I cannot wait for the updates!!! Please, keep them coming regularly... there's nothing more frustrating to us readers than writers who take forever to add updates... or, worse yet, writers who keep submitting story after story, none of which get completed, or hardly ever updated... you keep waiting for an update and now and then, one will come, but in the meantime, the author has added three new stories, none of which he/she intends to update any more frequently than the one you fell in love with, to begin with! Grrrh! So, please, don't leave us fans hangin', okay? Pretty please, with sugar on top? LOL! Again, you are so very talented, your characterizations are wonderful and right on the money! I can see, quite easily, in my mind's eye, Willow "opening mouth and inserting foot", never knowing the damage she was doing, and I can see Cordelia, hugging first and thinking later... and lastly, I can definitely see Xander and Spike... you write them (as well as Angel) so well, it's very easy to imagine them saying every word you write. As for Joyce, she's perfect, as well.. she always had an inner strength and a nuturing spirit, that I can see forgiving any embarassing situation Xander might find himself in. And, I can easily see Giles falling apart, and never knowing it was happening to himself... poor Giles. I can't wait to see what happens here! I DO hope that it isn't going to end anytime soon, and there's a few more "adventures" in store for us. For instance, I hope we see Leshar and the shurl get what's coming to them (and will we find out why the shurl turned on them?), I hope we return to the "farm", because as far as "masters" go, they aren't too bad and I kinda like them for the kindness they had, and what of the "mother-to-be"? I have to say, I can't see Spike stepping aside, so Xander can play "happy family" with her and the baby. If I was writing it, I'd probably have her either be too far gone, emotionally/mentally, and have to "go away" for a long while, or (and this sounds SO awfully cruel), but have her die in childbirth, and the baby stay with Spike and Xander... a child would "make" Xander have to be strong, wouldn't it? And, that way, no woman for Spike to have to be jealous of, and no resentment of Xander on her part, for the so-called "rape"... easy out, huh? But, that's if I was writing it... what are you planning, I wonder? Anyways, kudos again, on a well written piece... that, for all the reviews I read, a LOT of people are enjoying!!! Keep 'em coming... you're great!The only other "slave" type piece I've read that was as well written, was by Lady Arkin, at The Cartouche (http://www.inkpress.org/storyline/authors.php?no=3625). the first part was called "Whore", and is written with Stargate, SG-1 characters, Daniel and Jack, mainly. If you like those characters, it's well worth a read. But, other than that, yours is the only "slave" fiction I've come across that's so well done. You're amazing!!! Now, you've been "stroked", "schmoozed" and "sweet-talked", so get back to your keyboard!!! LOL! Seriously, hope to read more soon... it's a real joy to read your stuff. All the best to you... RippersPet
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From ANON - nomad on January 16, 2006
I kinda like him evil too.
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From ANON - Kagaya on January 13, 2006
Wow. Xander is finally back to somewhat his old self.

Ahh...Spike was so sweet towards Xander, is the ending near?
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From ANON - TheShadowCat on January 11, 2006
Oh, come on! What's with the never letting poor Xander getting off while Spike gets to play. It's not fair. And if you wait to long for the next update, I'll really let you know about unfairness. *wink*
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From ANON - xanderspikefan on January 08, 2006
woohoo xander and spike back together they ever do that again i will killl them both myself please write next chapter
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From ANON - TheShadowCat on January 08, 2006
We do get to see what happens next don't we? Please? *bats big kitty eyes* And please hurry with the next chapter.
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From ANON - TheShadowCat on January 06, 2006
You're trying to turn my fur white aren't you? GAH! Hurry with the next chapter please! I'll be waiting on pins and needles until the next update.
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From ANON - rngrdead on January 06, 2006
Ohhhh No NO NO!!!!!!

Please fix this! Poor Spike Poor Xan.... Please fix it

A poignant and wonderful chapter... but it *must* be better... at some stage it *must* be better!

Glorious writing as usual and thank you....

L
J
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From ANON - catsim on January 06, 2006
Oh....ooooohhhhhh.......sob. How mixed up they are. How very, very sad this chapter is. You have to fix this. Please. Plllleeeaaaasssseeeee!!!!!!

Wonderful writing, as always, but .......sob.......so, so sad. But you are right, Xander never gave himself willingly to Spike as a person. Just as a slave. But there is potential there! Oh, yes, there is. I didn't miss Spike's declaration about loving Xander. *Nods head*. Now, you just have to fix this.

Love ya

Cathy

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From ANON - spikexanderfan on January 06, 2006
what is xander thinking the ass i hope xander and spike do not split up *sob*next chapter soon please
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From ANON - LazySnake on December 31, 2005
Yay...Xander is back with Spike.
And is it my delusion or is Xander starting to resume back his old personality as in getting back his backbone?
Or is this a new 'issue'?
Happy New Year. ^_^ May you have a productive (read this as write more chapters) year.
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From ANON - catsim on December 30, 2005
Oooh, oooh, I'm going to add to my previous review. I had a thought whilst I was out shopping (I'm in Australia, and it's bloody hot out there!). Could Xander finally be breaking away from the slave mindset. Is he, perhaps, tired of being at the beck and call of demons, any demons, and that includes Spike? Could he be mending? Of course, that means that he'll have to break into tiny pieces first. So, who will put him back together again? Anonymous mother to be, perhaps? Looking forward, greatly, to the next inthralling chapters. Which will, of course, be soon.

Again, Happy new year to everyone.

Cathy
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From ANON - TheShadowCat on December 30, 2005
You know, first you spoil us by posting almost every day, then you disappear for a while, then you come back and start spoiling us again with daily posts, sometimes even two posts a day. Then what do you do? YOU DISAPPEAR AGAIN! **pant*huff*snort*pant**

Ok, now that I have that out of my system, I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter. Glad to see Spike's ok, but he has some 'splainin' to do. Wouldn't Xander's sale and who bought him have been public record? At least there should have been some witnesses he could have bribed/threatened. And was it a shurl or sharl (you have it spelled both ways) demon that had Spike all chained up and I'd really love to know her reason for that.

At any rate, great job and please update soon.
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