Click Here!

Reviews for Touch the Sun

By : Electra126
  • From ANON - Anon on January 03, 2005
    aww this is such a cute story. please keep writing it.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - hzleyes on January 03, 2005
    Really am loving this story. It's nice to see a sweet side to Faith and a naughty side to Buffy. I enjoyed the Buffy / Faith subtext on the show and love when I find a story that can take that and expand on it, be well written, and still have the characters voices be the same as on the show. I like the way you kept the major events from season 3 but altered them just a bit to fit into the Bufy / Faith love story dynamic, and so that Faith doesn't go bad, obviously. It's hard to do and most stories I've read seem to just re-write the season they are ficcing altogther to make things work. Please continue this, and often.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Antoinette on January 03, 2005
    I just finished this. WOW! There are so many gems in this story, where do I begin? Well, for starters, You have a tremendous fluency in Buffy-ese! I could hear Eliza Dushku's Faith narrating this from sentence one. You nailed her tone and rhythm, her propensity to be a bit of a tease in the tell-all department, and her colorful descriptions DEAD-ON! "William-the-Bloody-Pain-In-My-Ass," "Taking care of my hornies," "A drunk Cordie ... is a fun Cordie," and "Note to self: Fire my internal censor. Hire a new one," are just a few examples of things that made me howl. Insinuating Faith into the Aspect of the Demon episode and the Graduation Ceremony was wonderful ... as was your nod to the whole Buffy/Spike romance when Buff becomes the dark heroine with the line, "You don't need me -- You need to feel." Incredible. You've definitely got the whole down-on-the-love-muffin thang going on, too. There's really only one way to describe this story: Tour de Force.

    This is one for the FAVES list!

    BRAVO!


    Report Review

  • From ANON - Dylan on December 08, 2004
    Don't know if anyones following it? Are you MAD, girl? Of course you know...so I thought I'd show a little fellow fic writer support. We can stand united in smut and all that *wink* You already know I loved that last chapter right? Just in case you forgot...I LOVED it. And I don't use that word liberally, especially where Fuffuy fics are concerned, but DAMN that was hot. Who wouldn't want to worship Eliza's...err, I mean Faith's body like that....*slips into a dream like state*...Ahem, where was I? Oh yeah, even though I think I can see angst on the horizon, this fic is my fave of yours, and one of my faves I'm following at the min. I think there are only about 4 or 5 others, so feel honered...*grin* Ok, gonna shut up now and hope you continue this above ALL else....
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Queen Zulu on December 07, 2004
    You know what I love about your sex scenes, beyond the obvious advantages of them being hot, hot, hot? Well, it'd have to be the way they're long, but not overdone. They have stamina, just like the Slayers. I think I need to learn how to do that. Hmm. Today, you are my muse.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Hayley on December 07, 2004
    This is such a good story! Please continue, I want to know what happens next!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - jra on December 06, 2004
    ...Anyone who isn't following this story is an idiot.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Anon on December 06, 2004
    Of course we're still reading! This has been a great story,sexy,touching,funny,and very well-written. Waiting to see what's coming next...you know what I mean. Updates now please.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - cristina on December 06, 2004
    great update, nice to see you back!!!! :)
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Black Haired Demon on November 28, 2004
    WOWIE!! Gave me MORE I want moooorrre... Hell that was so good that now I'm again in the need of a shower and some other clean pants.

    Hurry up and update,update
    Report Review

  • From ANON - anon on November 15, 2004
    yay for fuffy sex! more more more!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Queen Zulu on November 10, 2004
    Once again, it's been a while since I reviewed, and I was trying to figure out why. I think it's because everytime I click on this story, I get the preamble, which is basically along these lines: "I never would have believed this could happen to me, but then it did." And every single time, that first line says to me: "Don't read this story."

    Now, like I've said before, you have some good writing here, some good retooling of s3 eps. Excellent Faith voice, good characterization. In this last chapter, Faith blowing up at Buffy in the library is a strong and believable scene. Angel has a good side and a bad side. There's three-dimensionalness to him that a lot of Buffy-love-interests lack in fuffy fics. The warm fuzzies are of the Extra Super Duper Warm and Softest Awesome Fuzzy variety, and I love the description of the kisses in the last bit of this part. So then, why, why, do I constantly click on this story and then think, "Don't want to read it"?

    Well, partly, I think, it's the fast pace--skippiner ser stuff or fast forwarding, which makes me want to ins instead of read; and it's also the title and summary, along with that first line. I think titles and summaries are crucial, as is the first sentence. That's supposed to be your hook. Your writing's good, but your summary doesn't reflect that. The title, as far as I can tell, doesn't have much to do with the events of the story. And that first line's a killer, because it tells the reader right off the bat that everything's going to turn out fine. It says: "You don't need to read this story, because I'm telling you right now how it ends before it even starts." The whole story is told in flashback.

    Now, please don't take this as a horrible, horrible criticism; it's more a matter of me reflecting on why I found it difficult to get into the story proper. Since I've figured it out, I know I'll remember this story, and I'll remember that I like it and want to read more. You've certainly set the hook to my flesh now. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter. Overall, I'm just putting this advice out there for future reference. Titles and summaries are what make people click on your story. I, personally, give writers ONE SENTENCE to grab my attention. If they t, It, I may skim a paragraph, but most often clicking the back button is easier.

    Anyway, I'm sorry if I sounded overly negative here. Again, that's not my intention. In fact, I hope I'm helpful. If I'm not, please feel free to tell me to shut up.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Anon on November 09, 2004
    omg. this is amazing, update it plz!!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - lemons on November 09, 2004
    NO NO NOOOO! you can't end it there! you are evil i say! but i love it so much! ya really gotta update soon! Im gonna go nuts waitign for this update! HURRY WOMAN!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Anon on November 08, 2004
    WOW!!!!
    Report Review

T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!