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From ANON - Kimber on June 03, 2004
Really....Spuffy....

Spike and Rebecca is going to be parents....and you expect us to believe Spuffy.....okay, lets see where this is leading...Yep, can see Buffy now loving being a step, or whatever that would make her.....

To be honest I haven't a clue as to WHO or WHAT Samuel is to Giles....don't care either....you lost me in all that mix. Haven't a clue where the whammy essence thing is going....and WHY the hell is BECCA PREGNANT?

So Buffy's scares are gone.....which scares....her bites from Drac and Angel? What about Becca's claiming bite, is that gone? and if not, why not?

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From ANON - Burnz on May 29, 2004
I still think your story has merit but I must agree with the other reviewers that this is really a general BtVS story. You appear to take great pains to include a multitude of side stories in you fic. While they are dramatic or comedic they make the tale as a whole branch out and become a bit more scattered so the story seems to meander and not go forward with any speed. Good luck with bring it together and finishing it.
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From ANON - Anon on May 28, 2004
more please.
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From ANON - Kimber on May 25, 2004
yeah, said I was through, but thought I would see where you had come at making this Buffy....

Read the part about the ring and said to myself....what a slap in Buffy's face that one was.....She may love him, but she does not trust him, and why should she/ she loved and trusted a souled vamp and look what it got her grief from her friends especally after Jenny's death/ Spike in her mind is like Angel, if he loses his chip he will go back to his murdering ways like Angel did after losing his soul......his pursuit of the ring was to destroy her.....if she had not pulled it off his finger he would have. He followed Oz and tortured Angel to get the ring back......not for the joys of walking in the sunlight, but to be lord and ruler and make name for himself as a bad ass master vampire that killed his 3rd slayer. Will be interesting if you address any of this in your y...y....or not.

Kimber

Just curious now how you will make this a happy Spuffy ending...
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From ANON - bridget on May 24, 2004
i can't believe that this is your first fic...it's great
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From ANON - ezvin7 on May 24, 2004
Hmmmm, he has claimed Rebecca.....but will have Buffy in the end hmmmmm.....she is going to be the good little puppy bitch and wait for her chance to be with him again...hmmmmm......God almost sounds like the mistress waiting for the wife to kick it. Because Buffyws tws that Rebecca knows that some how she will get another chance at being involved with Spike....Buffy is not stupid and knows what will need for that to happen now Spike has claimed his first love.....

Hmmm Anya, knowing that Buffy and the Council were at odds, and Giles no longer worked for the Council, didn't think it was important to leave clues, and such that Travers was a evil demon.....I can't believe that Travers didn't know Anya.....since D'hafforn was not of the good, but bad sorts I would imagine......I sure vengence demons was not considered good happy demons...

Still trying to figure out why all the girls and Spike tickle party in the bed?????????????????????????????

I will continue to read, only because I want to see how you get Super revamped to the good Spike to replace Wonder slayer Rebecca with runner up, Came back wrong Buffy. Oh and what is Spike going to do with that ring now....get a tan....

Cheers

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From ANON - Burnz on May 24, 2004
I still like your story although I am starting to get bogged down with the side stories. Since it may be a matter of life and death for a few if the characters I was expecting a good bit of urgency on their parts. I look forward to your updates.
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From ANON - Anon on May 23, 2004
More please, and you're doing a wonderful job, I never w hav have guessed that this is your first fic.
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From ANON - Angi on May 22, 2004
It really hurts to read this. Hurry up.
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From ANON - TTowerself on May 18, 2004
Why do people think that Buffy needs to be punished so....she came back wrong, messed up and depressed. In your story you say that a part of her brought back Rebecca.....so is Rebecca not somewhat responsible for that?

In your story you have not given a reason that Buffy should have trusted him enough, for her not to fight or hide what she feels sooo deeply she would beat him up to keep it from being real. He belittled her with his words and sex when she said no....he used her depression to take advantage of her, her need to feel alive. He knew she was using him in OMWF, IF she had not kissed him and intiated that night of violent sex...would he have killed her?

I agree with some that say, how Rebecca can judge something she knows nothing about....Spike is no longer her William from so long ago...SHE knows nothing of the relationship between the demon/man and the slayer/woman. She is acting like a blinded by love kinda girl....thinking with her heart and not her head, especially being a slayer herself. Spike was NEVER really good, just held back by the chip and learned how to play well with others to survive. He developed feelings for Joyce and Dawn, cause they looked at him and gave him a chance. Joyce even before he was chipped.

If you deepen this bond with Rebecca and Spike, then you have a lot of explaining to do to make it work with Spike and Buffy. You had Spike make his choice to easily, no second guessing himself....makes me wonder if he truly became attracted to Buffy because he could feel a part of Rebecca inside of her. I know you have an idea of where you are taking this story, and for some people it's going to be a hard job for you to sell that it's going to be a REAL spuffy ending. So good luck, you will get good reveiws and bad....but that is something to have considered when you decided to make such a strong Marysue character that seems to have no faults to be the lead character in your story and the love interest of Spike.....It will be interesting to follow this story and see who you connect the dots.

TT

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From ANON - Burnz on May 17, 2004
Good story. It makes Buffy face up to herself without having to have Spike wrench it out of her. I thought the confession scene was a bit easy but with the emotional rollercoaster going on in the chapter it was somewhat of a relief. Xander seemed to have accepted his lot and Buffy's confession a bit too easily though, makes me wonder if it is genuine...
Good job
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From ANON - Emma on May 17, 2004
I love this story. I really like Spuffy, but I do think that Buffy should be a little punished after how she treated Spike in the sixth season. Since it'll end up Spuffy, this story is becoming a quick favorite of mine, even though it is kinda sad. I just want to say that your writing style is wonderful, and I look forward to many more updates in the near future!
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From ANON - Beatrice on May 17, 2004
I don't mind that you're building the Buffy Spike stuff slowly. And I'm curious to see where the council thing goes. More please!
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From ANON - Ezvin7 on May 17, 2004
Okay

You say you are going to make this a Spuffy fic.....hmmmmm. I myself as a woman is highly upset that you expect a strong woman such as Buffy to set back and wait in the wings for someone to either die or something....for one she should be worried if this woman is playing with Spike's affection....(if she knows something that she is not telling everyone) and implying she still has a chance. To me Buffy would think the lady is leading Spike down the path of broken hearts.....

First and formost....who the hell does Rebecca think she is judging Buffy. Rebecca is a former Slayer and knowst evt evil, bloody killers vampires are.....and why did Rebecca come back OKAY and Buffy didn't? That is still very confusing to me. Why is the major focus on this story on Rebecca and how perfect she is and is friends with everyone and has the answer to everything. She has no idea what Buffy went through with Angle/Angleus/Dru/Faith thingy...followed up by Parker...then the Riley disaster parts one and two....Rebecca found her true love...married her true love...and never knew what heartbreak and disastorus relationships consisted of....let alone how it felt. Now she has come back...and found her true love and yells at the girl he has tormented in one form or another for a few years.....

As for Anya....who is she to look down her nose down at Buffy....she had knowledge that things were not normal slayer business as back in Rebecca's day....She has met Quentin....and she should have known he was a demon....why hasn't she shared this with the group before this?

When is Spike going to own up to his fucking up his relationship with Buffy as well....he was no peachy kinda guy before Becca came back from the dead. Yes, he was obsessvily in love with Buffy, but had a piss poor way of showing it. Your Spike is living in his land of denial that he had anything to do with pushing Buffy to her limit...telling her she came back wrong....that she belongs in the dark with him....or and his comment about better laying the slayer instead of slaying, well in general that is what he implied....and he wonders why she freaked about being his girl.....a bite much, yes...t tht this again it was a different emotion that she was able to exhibit. He didn't mind it thou it would seem at the birthday party.....LOL! I think he thought it was a pre engagement ritual for undead vamps....(but then did the birthday party happen in your story). Then again...Rebecca comes to to.and.and all his evil thoughts was pushed out of town....I guess he won't be joining the guys at Willie's for kitty poker and such, LOL!

I think Spike made his choice, and will have to do some serious ass kissing to get Buffy to come back not feeling second best...cause right now....she has a lot to live up too with how you have built Rebecca's character. I will continue to follow this story for now....but I will be highly upset if Spuffy is not made apparent very soon without deepening this relationship with specca any further....I hope you know this is a tough crowd that takes SPUFFY very seriously and tort..rt....that is why it was given it's own section....to protect us from Mary sue characters that really piss us off.

Another question.....just what part of Buffy again is now part of Rebecca....is it something that should be givenk sok so Buffy can move on with her life and feel like living again?

If you had placed it in the general section I would not have read it....you write very well, and the story is excellent....but in my heart I just can't feel good about what is going on here for Spuffy goodness. It's like having problems with your boyfiend and he goes back to the EX....would you really take him back?

Kimberly ...c...could be:) will have to wait and see.

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From ANON - Kat on May 17, 2004
Not sure why you're insisting on putting this in the Spike/Buffy section when they are NOT the main pairing here. I'm not saying your fic sucks or anything, because it doesn't, but you're obviously pissing off a lot of people who are expecting something different. If you have to keep telling everyone what the pairing is there's a problem. There's no reason this can't go in the general section- and you'd probably get more positive reviews if it did rather than people complaining about Mary Sue fics.
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