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Reviews for Escape to oblivion

By : melly
  • From ANON - Am-Chau Yarkona on October 29, 2002
    Good story! I had some doubts at the beginning, espcially the part where Xander phoned Angel, becuase that felt drastically out of character, but I persevred, and you did explain it- rather well, in fact. I have some minor issues with the grammar and punctuation in places- full stops instead of commas, capital letters missing on people's (and hellgoddess') names- but they aren't major problems.
    Your Spike is well written, in particular his aggressive reaction to waking up in Xander's bed, although you seem to be a little uncomfortable with him sometimes, and once you feel into a common trap- overuse of 'bloody'. He says it often, but not every third word. There were also a couple of times when what i guess are you own speech patterns crept in, once with Spike, where you had him say 'also', where my inner Spike would say 'too', and once with Xander, when you had him say 'I became' instead of the less formal 'I got'.
    I was slightly uncomfortable with Spike thinking 'I want drugs'. It is my impression that most drug users would think 'I want some crack' or whatever, instead of the generic. I venture to suggest that a little research might go a long way here, as well as improving your telling of what happens when he gives up. I'd have liked some more in-depth angst!
    Overall, you've written a nice, if slightly superficial, story. Keep up the good work!
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