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Reviews for Angels in Flight

By : Aeris
  • From angelnomiko on November 30, 2008
    please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

    angel
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  • From MsLilly on October 11, 2008
    Okay... I have decided to NOT shout out the first thing that came to mind as I read this chapter/story... Cause you'd probably get offended, I know I would.

    The thing is, you're going way too fast. If you wanted to get to the sunnydale crew fast you probably should have started somewhere after Harry had defeated Tom and showed him as an adult/teen to let people get to know his personality, and then explained the backstory. Or you could have showed the "last battle" in more detail. It does seem really hurried as it is, and you kinda make Harry seem a little bit like a male Mary-Sue... He just seems really overpowered, especially when you add the slayer thing to the superpowerfull and fast training... And you didn't even mention horocruxes, not that I blame you since book six and everything in it sucks, and well, it's all just too speedy for my taste...

    The thing about going this fast is that everything you want in it seems forced. There's just too much info for one chapter. Like the part about Harry being really good at art, if he's never picked up a paintbrush before he definetly wouldn't be able to paint a whole complicated mural without being some sort of savant or having some magical painting power.

    It started out as something that I would gladly read to the end and ended as a pretty much average superpowered!rebellious!slayer!Harry...
    Soo.. I'm probably not gonna wish for the next chapter. But a lot of people will probably like it, and it was a good concept till you started adding too much.

    I hope I haven't offended you with this... I just can't keep my mouth shut about things like that, I guess I've gotten spoiled with all the great fanfics I read... Yeah... Soo, bye.

    /Eli
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