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Reviews for Disciplining Dawn

By : MTL
  • From alienyouthct on July 30, 2008
    Honestly, at this point I'm more interested in seeing where the night goes as far as Buffy/Dawn/other debauchery. The idea of Buffy whoring Dawn out and then punishing her is, unless you introduce any new sets of kinks to their life beyond bondage and the stereotypical over the top dom/sub routine, pretty much all you have left to explore. Anything else right now is just a retread of ground you walked in the earlier chapters. This one, I just sorta skimmed through, which is disappointing to me because I've been eagerly awaiting a new chapter.
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  • From alienyouthct on July 11, 2008
    I hope that you have more brains than most of the reviewers; both Spike and Xander are thoroughly unacceptable men to use in the story due entirely to the fact that they care. Even if Buffy has fallen into depravity with Dawn, unless you want to jump the shark by turning it into "Everyone has a secret dark side and we never knew", I can't see Xander approving of Buffy and Dawn's incestuous relationship, much less partaking in statutory rape as Buffy whores Dawn out. Spike also claims to care about Buffy and while he might be easier to convince, he treated Dawn as a younger sister and respected Joyce enough that I can't see him doing it either.

    In conclusion... I think a trip to a back room at Willy's with a pair (or more) of nice bigger-than-human demon men is just what Dawnie needs. ;)
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  • From Sepiroth189 on June 29, 2008
    please let the guy be Xander pretty pkease
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  • From ANON - Emanuel on June 07, 2008

    Nice Update, I like it! Seing how Buffy and Dawn interact with each other and the scoobies while still figuring out how to best handle their mistress/slave relationship makes for some entertaining reading. Hopefully there'll be more of that in the next chapter...? Keep 'em cumming... ;-)
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  • From ANON - bob on May 28, 2008
    is xander going to get some pussy in this story either form dawn or buffy


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  • From ANON - Doug on May 14, 2008
    Well, 7 wonderful chps. later they are bound to one another as anyone could hope for. Can't thank you enough for this. And thank you for steering it away from how rough it was going toward in 5. I figured you'd have them as M / s and that Buffy would take Dawn's cherry, but am rather in awe of the "Squirting Strap-on". And that she so thoroughly claimed Dawn with it.
    So, you could either leave it now as is with 7 {and thus leave the future to our individual dirty minds}, or maybe do a short 8 with the next morning showing us Xander (as if on a usual schoolday) popping in to pick her up and noticing the new shiny necklace, and attitude, Dawn is displaying. A few words and questions are exchanged, during which a breathless Willow and Tara burst into the house, red-faced and panting from dashing from their car. And perhaps in varying degrees of red between the two from the thoughts generated by the thunderbolt that went through first Willow, when during some playful morning sex she realized just What that extra flavour for the peas and carrots was, to how Tara reacted to that tidbit of information. And the both of them finally having a good clear look at the Summers' girls, and turning 'Stop-sign' red.
    And lastly, in that dead silence, in walks Anya. And as words begin to fly, and body language changes and flows... she holds out her hands and shouts for quiet, and after a few heartbeats of time declares. . "I'm speechless. Absolutly speechless".
    Ha, I kill me.
    Or maybe just have a short epilogue that shows some time has passed and how the girls are coping with their new roles.
    Again, thank you so very much for this.
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  • From ANON - Crista on April 07, 2008
    ...can Dawn & Spike have sex, please? =)
    Buffy can be there too, it doesn't matter.
    More more more! I
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  • From ANON - doug on April 07, 2008
    Okay, it occurred to me that after 'Friday' Dawn is going to be a very buzy and frustrated little girl. For right now, I do hope they are heading up the stairs so Buffy can give Dawn a nice bath (or shower) for two. All those Peas and Carrots, can't neglect that something might have been missed. And if she is going to wash out the front well its most efficient to do that backside and instill a little more Discipline in our favourite victim.
    So, come Friday, what means will be used to make sure Dawn is up, dressed, and ready for school when Xander shows up... and will this be our chance to see Buffy ask him about doing a little remodeling in either the Master-bath or something for the basement, or maybe both, while off to one side Dawns' ears are burning with the thoughts those ideas generate. Knowing (HOPING !!!!) she could perhaps have her big sister ALL to herself for the coming weekend, how shall she behave or misbehave because of that?
    Do keep it up. Thanks.
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  • From ANON - Crow on April 06, 2008
    thanx great story!!!!! I would expect nothing less, just wondering are you gonna update your wrestling fics? more plz!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - doug on April 03, 2008
    Okay, pt 6 was a little better overall. Can't wait to see how Buffy torments Dawn now. Thanks.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 02, 2008
    Great update! Loved the Willow part... ;-)
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 01, 2008
    Useless, pleasure toy Dawnie definitely needs to get whored out to the school's sports teams at some point to fulfill the Dawn/Others, DP, and Moresome promised in the summary... ;)
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 30, 2008
    More,please. Love the idea of Dawn being used for toilet paper in the future.Don't be afraid to go there.
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  • From ANON - doug on March 27, 2008
    Well, this is my third review for this after all, and I knew I needed to get in here with something after chp.4 and its my fault for not.
    After 3, we all saw that Buffy had not just fallen by the wayside in her -tude, but shown she had quite the taste for it, NO pun intended.
    With 4, there are two moments: 1 that what Spike had left her with and that Buffy had a use for it later and, 2 Spike realized that a few things have changed in the Summers' household. Just thinking what 'your' Buffy had in mind for Dawn and how she might share Spikes deposit Did Not thrill me, cosidering everything else.

    5. ?

    Yeah, its a big question mark. And we all now see that Buffy has not fallen. . . but leapt off the Empire State Building into something harsh. With the first two, it could have turned into a loving, Erotic affair. Punishment, yes. A check and balance on right and wrong, sure. But its going rather farther than I'm happy with. Hope it gets turned around some at least.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 24, 2008
    Oh my, Buffy sure is developing a seriously mean streak. I look forward to finding out where it will take the two Summers girls!
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