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Reviews for Disciplining Dawn

By : MTL
  • From ANON - Douglas on September 04, 2015
    Yes, its me, and its 2015 ???!!??!! My last review was Waaayyyy back in 2009, like alot of other peoples. What with stories then getting new chps and with fresh new stories being added, WOW, time does fly. So, they're in the Bronze, Buffy has a new `imported` beer for the gang..... and YES, I had to rub another one out!!!!
    Fire up the whizbang gizmo, and please PLEASE, give us some more for this???
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  • From ANON - Lionsmercy on December 21, 2014
    You have a lot of potential here that goes untapped because of using the S/M trope of Master/Slave. By having Dawn do homework in your Chapter five section you provide a way for the topic of endentured service to come up which is a type of contract labor that was common in the early American colonies historically where the servant would serve for a term of something like seven year after which they were set free. With this sort of contract in place you could pace the story and allow it to become a strange romance allowing for Dawn and Buffy to keep surprising a one upping each relationship going in all facets of life instead Dawn becoming this weird sex crazed and marionette/robot, they could still act like sisters with the younger/older dynamic still there while still seeing overtones of dominance and submission warring with love and caring and the movement towards and equal relationship and marriage... You could easily make this forty chapters and have it equal the quality of some of the best Buffy/Dawn stories on the Internet like "The Kiss", "Dawn's Confusion", and my personal favorite "For You".
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  • From Krulos on May 31, 2014
    Chapter #2.)
    Well, I liked Buffy in the beginning of this chapter, she has a lot of proper attitudes, but her definition of girl-girl love is a bit off: Platonic (sisterly) love between females is absolutely beautiful and proper, for instance; her willingness to die for her friends is such a love... but girl-girl Sexual 'love' (what I would rightly call a form of lesbian lust) is Never Ok! If it comes up as a Desire, which you rightly have her dealing with... that is Nothing but an email from Perdition, and not wicked in desire (desire is never sinful, only acts are), but if one Acts upon it: then one does wrong! (that's what I'd tell her as her pastor, in fact)
    Faith had her own issues to deal with, as would Willow.
    Honestly, I liked Buffy's attitudes in the beginning of this chapter!
    Good work on a horrible situation.
    Buffy the sadist; that's different!
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  • From ANON - Fenix Tilk on February 15, 2012
    That's a great story, best of yours in fact. It's so sad it wasn't finished. Maybe you can continue it? That would be more than great...
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  • From alienyouthct on January 24, 2010
    Is it dead?
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  • From ANON - The_Void on November 18, 2009
    Dammit, I need to see more of this! Update soon!

    And may I make a request: Dawn in a catholic schoolgirl outfit. *drools* Maybe Buffy could spank her for being a naughty girl, then make her eat her pussy, then fuck her hard with a strap-on.
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  • From darthme1011 on September 30, 2009
    damn.... hope to see more of this soon and i would love to see a one tree hill fic where Peyton doms ether brooke and/or haley
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  • From on September 21, 2009
    great sory can xander get some buffy or dawn
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  • From ANON - Douglas on August 10, 2009
    Oh, god, but its me. Again. And damn if it hasn't been a dogs' age since my last posting. Well, thanks again to our great Author and this latest chp... Well, I see that idea of `Peas and Carrots` took hold, and the more I think of it maybe it Should be Anya that gets Buffy's permission. And it just occured to me it might also be some nameless Bartender or a Bouncer who just happened to notice that the light from the Kliegs was.. drifting as they were pouring drinks. So of course the eye wandered, and being used to working there perhaps knew the trick of standing behind a post or beam to shield the glare away to see the shadows in an unlit spot better. And saw something that made them Need to take a 'Bathroom Break'. Damn, just thought of this, too. What about `Kit`, Dawns' friend from school???
    And still a whole lot of weekend left!!

    God, but this is some good stuff. Thanks again.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 07, 2009
    Thank you for finally updating this story! I really liked the latest chapter, VERY sexy! I'm sticking with my assessment, that this is your best story so far. Please keep at it, I really enjoy reading it!
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  • From LondonMarie on May 16, 2009
    please make the male member of their escapades spike cause if it's xander....ewwww
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  • From alienyouthct on April 30, 2009
    So is this dead?
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  • From ANON - Jaime on September 01, 2008
    i hope you update it soon cause i like it so far
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  • From ANON - Doug on August 08, 2008
    Well, me again. And so, a few items, starting with a big Thank You! Well, first, when I posted after reading 8 (meaning when you hit that button on the end) I got to read all the thoughts of everyone before me. Including stuff I hadn't read yet. So I looked a little bit, but not too hard.

    So, now that I've read 9 And 10, I also agree with those who say you should shy away from either Xander and/or Spike being involved. They have all spilled too much blood and honor and love to cross such a line as that, if left under normal circumstances... and we All know dear Buffy is anything but normal. How would the boys respond to a moment of weakness And have that slutty blonde offer an enticement tooo strong to resist (I'm thinking like how SMG was dressed up for a cover of RollingStone mag to play the devil). Now for Xander it should be a big NO for anything with either Dawn or Buffy, but Anya??? Lets hope her grip on humanity (and her 'love' for Xander) is stronger.
    As for Spike, no, he'll not sully the 'lil bit... but her sister is something else. I could see Dawn being sat down to watch a lesson in self-discipline when its shown that Buffy crossed a line or four herself, knew it, and did it again anyways. And Spikes' pull to the Slayer, to show Her in another way to his way of thinking that they are still more alike then she will admit. And she can bitch all she wants, I think alot of us see (and yes will accept) she likes it rough. Nay, needs it rough, to help her keep the creature she feels inside herself contained, if not outright tamed.

    So, that leaves us with somebody faceless and nameless: RJ fits the bill. And that Self-punishment in 9, and then that hot scene in the bedroom. You're really hitting the mark, and thank you, I also now realize you were giving me something else I asked for with what you had play out at the end of 8, and showed us another bit with those bars that Dawn doesn't remember being there before in 10.
    Just keep it up, Dear Author. Please. Thanx
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  • From ANON - Doug on August 01, 2008
    Well, its me again, and it seemed like every few days I'd look for another chapter, but left stuck to stew in my own juices. HA! And then, there it was. So I start reading... and barely get to where they're saying 'good morning' and I'd have to run out. A couple 3 weeks or so, I sit to bask in your words (wank off), and Shit, have to take off again.
    Somewhere along the line I saw that there was Another chapter! I keep trying to read from where I left off, and They kept pissing me off. And there is another chapter... then another!!!
    Well, I finally finished chp 8 with but 1 short interruption this morning. Now everyone, lets think about what chp 8 was like oh half-way through? What was my delay this morn'?
    I SPUUGHED into the bathroom sink!
    But 8 is now done, and Sunday is all reading day for me.
    Damn fine job keep up the good stuff. Thanks.
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